Author Note: This is a free-writing journal entry that I decided to write so Enjoy!
Driving the backroads
in the summer of '09
We pass farms and houses
All slightly different
I continue to stare contently on the road
watching the trees and grass speed by
getting only a glimpse
then I start to think
thoughts bubbling in my head
there for a second then popping
not letting me comprehend
the path, the road
they take you to places
you've never been before
showing you things
you've never seen before
then they pass
they leave your mind forever
you miss those things
you've seen or experienced
but you have to continue
down that road
otherwise you will never
get to the places you truly want to remember
I thought this was a good piece and it was kind of funny because it walked the line between comedy and irony.
ReplyDeleteI like this as an extended metaphor. You stick with this idea of walking down the road. I would suggest looking at all the words that aren't concrete, that aren't specific, and replacing that language with vivid, concrete images.
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